Decide on this for me...


by Twister

22 years, 10 months ago


I'm currently writing a new story (not part of any of the Twister series) and I was wondering, should I involve the GB's in this. I was trying to for once write one without them, but I'm not sure if I should add them into it or not. It's about this guy (who's kinda suicidal) and he keeps getting visited by these voices and they laugh at him and torment him. Here's a little piece of the first paragraph:

He looked up into the mirror and a pale white figure slid by the door. He gasped and wheeled around, facing the door. “What the hell is wrong with me?” he whispered to himself. Sweat was dripping off his black hair and running down his forehead. He was shaking violently, and was feeling cold. He could feel it all around him. His heart was pounding tremendously. Suddenly, he heard a loud pounding coming from the next room. He heard glass breaking, and the voices continued tormenting him. “Oh, please make it stop,” he cried. He knelt down to the ground and crawled out of the bathroom. The door slammed behind him. He jumped and got up, running behind the couch. It was dark all around him. He looked down beside him where he was crawled up and he found the knife. He reached for it, but it moved away. He looked down at his wrist, which had four or five cuts. Medicine prescription pills were lying all around him. “Give me my knife,” he cried. “You can’t have it,” said a child’s voice. The knife was suddenly lifted up and was hovering in mid-air. Then, it suddenly flew through the air as if it had been thrown. It soared through the air and stuck into the wall.

So, what do you think? Should I add the GB's or not?

by Egon15

22 years, 10 months ago


That's really scarey!!! I think that adding in the GBs might take away from that, but if you do it right, it'll scare the pants off of anyone!! Go ahead, experiment with it.

by Twister

22 years, 10 months ago


Sweet, the more I think about it, this would be a cool thing to add this to the fanfic section of this site. But I'll experiment around first and see what comes up. Thanks

by Biggsexi

22 years, 10 months ago


Sounds awesome the way it is.. I don't think you need to add the GB's either.

by Ghostbuster4evr

22 years, 10 months ago


This is sounding good so far. Yeah the addition of the GB's would be a bit of a letdown.

by Twister

22 years, 10 months ago


Well, for now, I'm experimenting with the GB's in it, but if that doesn't work I'll just write an alternate story to it.

by Dr.Spengler

22 years, 10 months ago


Yeah, I'd suggest experiment with it a little with GBs in it and see what happens. Interesting and scary!

by Twister

22 years, 10 months ago


K, well, I wrote it with the GB's and submitted it. It's called “blade of insanity” but sad to say, it somewhat slacks off at the end.

by Biggsexi

22 years, 10 months ago


yeah, when I get towards the end i always tend to rush, and it causes it to slack off at the end. SO, i know how ya feel. wink

by Twister

22 years, 10 months ago


It's not that I rushed, I just sorta ran out of ideas, but hey, give me credit for trying at least.