I was thinking maybe, a story to be GBIII?

Heres a part from the middle of the story…


About 10 minutes later a cab pulled up. Ray and Winston got in the back and
looked up front. There was slime covering the steering wheel! No one was
driving. Ray and Winston looked at eachother. They quickly tried to open the
doors, but they were encrusted in pink slime. “NO!” Winston said. The slime
on the wheel sparked. Suddenly the car lurched forward and Ray and Winston
were thrown back into the leather seats as the car floated up. They yelled as
the car began to pick up big speed. “A hover car isn’t supposed to go this
fast!” yelled Ray. Winston looked at Ray with wide eyes, he was too scared
to talk. Ray looked at the speedometer. The needle began spinning faster and
faster. Winston looked at the fuel, the needle was steadily dropping to empty.
Suddenly they ran out of gas…

Does it sound good? Remember this is just part of it.

Pretty good so far!!

Good luck with the rest of it

John

Trippinbeaufords@aol.com

Well, this is a good part of it, just keep working at it.

Thanks guys, it's getting to be long!

Later on, I'll post the prolouge.

Here's the prolouge…


The mall was full of movement and noise as Dana walked around with her 8
year old son Oscar. “I really want to go in the toy department!” Oscar said
begging. This was the fifth time he asked. Dana knew if she went, then she
wouldn’t be able to leave until she bought something, yet, it was the only way to satisfy her son. “Okay,” she sighed. She walked over to the toy store and Oscar ran in with a smile on his face. Dana followed Oscar into the toy department. Oscar ran to the back to look at action figures. Dana noticed the Ghostbusters action figures from 1989, those toys used to sell real fast, but no one bought them anymore now. She looked at the Venkman figure, and then at the Stanz figure. She remembered back to when she had been turned into a terror dog, and then thought of when a possessed painting of Vigo the Carpathian had attacked her and her child. She thought to herself, what a strange life. She continued to glance at the unpopular Ghostbuster figurines.
Oscar was on another aisle, looking at toy water guns. He picked up
one of the guns and pretended to be shooting. Dana smiled at Oscar. But
something wasn’t right, the toy gun was not like the other ones. Dana tried to
figure out what was happening. The gun started to actually shoot. A pink
slimy substance shot out, reminding Dana of the Slime Blowers the
Ghostbusters had used. “WHOA!” said Oscar in surprise. Dana quickly ran
over to him and tried to stop the gun. “Put is down!” she yelled. She yanked but it was stuck to his hands. “Help!” said Oscar. Dana frantically pulled at the water gun with all her might. Other people started to watch. The slime
from the gun started smoking and the gun fell to the floor. Oscar rubbed his hands and looked at the toy gun on the floor. There was yellow/pink slime
everywhere. It started glowing eerily. Dana stared with wide eyes as slime started to rise and suddenly, as if invisble hands were shaping it, it turned into a hideous beast of slime. It had glowing red eyes. The mouth opened and a hideous unearthly screech was heard. Everybody ran, yelling. Dana screamed, picked up Oscar and ran from the store. As she ran she thought to herself, Why must everything happen to me! She ran until she was far from the mall. “Not again…” she said to herself….


Tell me what you think, it's getting pretty long, this is the beginning/prolouge.

Here's the prolouge…


The mall was full of movement and noise as Dana walked around with her 8
year old son Oscar. “I really want to go in the toy department!” Oscar said
begging. This was the fifth time he asked. Dana knew if she went, then she
wouldn’t be able to leave until she bought something, yet, it was the only way to satisfy her son. “Okay,” she sighed. She walked over to the toy store and Oscar ran in with a smile on his face. Dana followed Oscar into the toy department. Oscar ran to the back to look at action figures. Dana noticed the Ghostbusters action figures from 1989, those toys used to sell real fast, but no one bought them anymore now. She looked at the Venkman figure, and then at the Stanz figure. She remembered back to when she had been turned into a terror dog, and then thought of when a possessed painting of Vigo the Carpathian had attacked her and her child. She thought to herself, what a strange life. She continued to glance at the unpopular Ghostbuster figurines.
Oscar was on another aisle, looking at toy water guns. He picked up
one of the guns and pretended to be shooting. Dana smiled at Oscar. But
something wasn’t right, the toy gun was not like the other ones. Dana tried to
figure out what was happening. The gun started to actually shoot. A pink
slimy substance shot out, reminding Dana of the Slime Blowers the
Ghostbusters had used. “WHOA!” said Oscar in surprise. Dana quickly ran
over to him and tried to stop the gun. “Put is down!” she yelled. She yanked but it was stuck to his hands. “Help!” said Oscar. Dana frantically pulled at the water gun with all her might. Other people started to watch. The slime
from the gun started smoking and the gun fell to the floor. Oscar rubbed his hands and looked at the toy gun on the floor. There was yellow/pink slime
everywhere. It started glowing eerily. Dana stared with wide eyes as slime started to rise and suddenly, as if invisble hands were shaping it, it turned into a hideous beast of slime. It had glowing red eyes. The mouth opened and a hideous unearthly screech was heard. Everybody ran, yelling. Dana screamed, picked up Oscar and ran from the store. As she ran she thought to herself, Why must everything happen to me! She ran until she was far from the mall. “Not again…” she said to herself….